September 27, 2012
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What the fuck are you even talking about
When you tell me that I’m a good writer? I don’t see it. All I see is elementary language, crude in its composition. Stop lying to me, and I’m not fucking kidding. I’m pissed at every person who has ever told me that my writing is good, because it’s NOT.
This is what I have, and it’s absolute, motherfucking shit. FUCKING UGH… THE LACK OF BEAUTIFUL WORDS MAKES ME SICK…
Rita sat on the rock, gazing at the sunset. The ball of fire was nearly at the horizon and on the other side of the sky the stars were starting to show. The sky was on fire, with brilliant oranges, reds, and pinks lighting it up. The desert was starting to get chilly from the lack of sunlight and she wrapped her arms around her sides, hugging herself within her hoodie. She knew she should leave her cave, but she couldn’t will herself to move. The wolves and coyotes would start howling at the moon soon, yet she sat on her rock, just outside it. She snapped a picture of this sunset in her mind as she watched the sun sink ever lower. Twilight descended on her as she eyed the stars, finally standing. The moon lit the path back to her Jeep and she climbed in with a heavy heart. She knew what she had to do. It didn’t sit well with her, but she had to. Rita had to die.
Comments (20)
“its not always the words you choose, but rather the meaning you put behind them”. I know great writers who use words that are common amongst their younger siblings. what makes them stand out is that the way they use the words. yes it is nice to read words that are unique and colorful, but it takes true talent and skill to actually engulf the reader into your writings with simple language. I would much rather read something with a better meaning rather than something with intricate words.
I think you are a great writer, you should try looking beyond the words and find the deeper beauty in things.
why? WHY? WHY DID RITA HAVE TO DIE??? *bangs fist*
As writers we are our own worse critics. You sound like you want to write like someone else and not you. Did it ever occur to you that those who say you are good want to write like you? They would take all your shit writing and be happy with it.I am not saying not to try and get better. I am just saying maybe they were telling the truth how THEY saw it.
@skeptic42 - I just figured out she’s an alien. She can change what she looks like, but only if she dies (maybe I’ve been watching too much Doctor Who….). She wants to change her appearance and move somewhere else.
I am sorry, that you feel that is true. If I have said so, its because I thought I’d give you some encouragement. Don’t be so hard on yourself! You perhaps, need to see your strengths, the way others see them. Don’t get discouraged! =) Mark
I enjoy and love reading a good peace with simple meaningful words…… those intricate words can sometimes be complicated… don’t be so hard with yourself….. you are good as it is.
Don’t be too hard on yourself my love. Things take many, many drafts to perfect until you’re blissfully happy with them.
You write just fine. Practice makes better, and as you continue to write, the combination of honed skills and inspiration will produce work that will bring delight to many.
I liked that and wanted to read more,just keep writing and it will flow!
profound, stimulating, entrapping, unbelievable—there…I didn’t tell what you would normally hear and spoke with the truth about this blog. Completely agree about your point though.
How do you think I feel when I study chess every day and night month after month and I’m still not good enough to improve my rating.
You’re a little repetitive with some of your words, but overall I enjoyed it. It’s definitely got some potential.
And if you really feel like you’re terrible at writing, KEEP WRITING. It’s the only way to improve on it.
I enjoy your writing. I’ve read pieces from people who claim to be editors and other “I’m qualified to write” people and I can’t stand their dribble. But I like your stuff – especially the steamy pieces. Those are very good hehehehe
Keep writing! And we’re all our worst critics – I hate a lot of my pieces too (but I write for enjoyment because I know I’d never aspire to publish haha).
But we all love you and we’re here to support your writing.
So… yeah… KEEP WRITING!
*big hug*
Writing this, I’m guessing you want compliments. This kind of post will only bring up how people feel about you emotionally. I know that loving someone makes you biased, no matter how much I’d like to think otherwise. However, if you want genuine feedback because you want to improve your writing, I suggest taking it to a site specifically for that. Xanga is not the best environment for writing and learning about writing. In fact, when I’ve told others that is what I’m looking for, they condemned me and told me I’m a shallow bitch looking for fans. I withhold any opinion I have of your writing, first because I like you as a person and I know it colors my opinion, and secondly, because I haven’t read enough of your writing to really say. If you really, genuinely deep down in your heart, want to be good at writing, I suggest seeking out feedback from people who don’t know you personally.
A lot of my classes in school start with the profs discussing grammar with us. You know how to write a sentence. I hate when people compliment me on something that everyone should just know how to do. I totally get you. So you know, chill. There are some people who abuse punctuation, kill sentences with run-ons, and just abuse language in general.
As for your style, you can’t edit what isn’t written. Don’t expect perfection the first time you pen something down. Just write. Edit later. That’s why writing is such a process. If writing was easy, everyone would do it. Your writing isn’t bad, which is sort of what you’re implying with the, “I hate when people say it’s good.” commentary. Keep going with it Crystal. Like Hemingway said, “Writing is easy. You just sit at your typewriter and bleed.”
@None_May_Have_Her - Your bluntness should be a blessing when you’re helping with something like that. Bluntness is so refreshing.
{@kkrriiissyy} Honesty is refreshing, but only when accompanied by tact and fact.
@None_May_Have_Her - I just think it’s sad that we live in a world where people are more upset over honesty than they are by lies.
{@kkrriiissyy} Yet, that certainly isn’t the saddest thing about it.
@None_May_Have_Her - Another sad truth. ♥