November 23, 2009
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My Fucking Hand
You told me you loved me and held me and fucked me. You spread your lies like your seed. All those days and nights you smiled and told me pretty words I believed. Every time I think of you now I ball my fist and the hate radiates from me until all I can see is red. It wasn’t enough. It was never enough.
You failed me when I needed you. You didn’t come when I called. You were in bed fucking a beautiful red-headed stranger and drinking her honey like it was mine. I smelled her when I walked into the house and you claimed it was my smell. I don’t smell like that.
I know I don’t smell like that and when I found a long red hair you started yelling at me to get the fuck out of your house and I hated you in that moment when I felt my heart cracking in my chest but you didn’t care and you just threw my things on the lawn like I was yesterdays trash.
My tears meant nothing to you because I now know you lied to me with pretty words and a smile and now my fucking hand is cut in two because you missed my heart.
(this is a work of fiction
Comments (41)
Painful, yet beautiful. Love ya, girl. *hugs*
My god…
ouch….. nothing more to say about that
@undertheglass - @pawnshop_heart - @Paul_Partisan - Oh, haha this didn’t actually happen to me! Sorry, I was just writing!
damn.
hugs from a person who has had a similiar experience.
@crazy2love - Still! It’s amazing.
@pawnshop_heart - Oh thanks
I haven’t written much in a long time, so I wasn’t sure if I was still any good or not! My mother’s always raving about my writing talents, but of course she has to say that, she’s my mother.
Wow, if it didn’t happen to you, you sure sold it. Damn. Solid piece of writing.
Stupid SOB. You’re better off without him sweetface! ♥
@petitenoirtenue - Oops. I guess I should have read the comments first. This is brilliant. ♥
Dang. That hurt.
@crazy2love - It’s good. Better than good. And I’m not your mom so I don’t “have” to say that. =P
@petitenoirtenue - Heh it’s okay, I just added it’s a work of fiction at the bottom
@poetically_truthful - Thank you
@mathematicalbagpiper - Thanks!
@pawnshop_heart - lmao!! Thanks =]
@ccarothers - Yes, it would hurt a lot if it ever happened to me…I really hope it never does!
Damn; powerful!
@mathematicalbagpiper - A very good point. Without the disclaimer, I would have assumed this was from experience.
Great imagination!
oh it’s fiction. i was about to say..that is harsh! but glad it was..that sounded so terrible.
Wow…that was intense, and realistic, I liked it
i really like this!!
(where’s a like button when you need it?! haha)
I was about to say I feel your pain till I saw the little disclaimer at the bottom.
Very intense. Glad it didn’t really happen though… that kind of heartbreak sucks.
@lonelywanderer2 - @jmallory - @TheMarriedFreshman - Thanks
@LadyAsianInvasion - It was terrible in my mind while I wrote it. I felt heartbroken for whoever does go through that kind of heartbreak.
@FallenReign - Thanks
@AnchorsAwayx - Haha I know! I think that a lot when I see a pulse I like or agree with!
@doesthisdefineme - hehe =]
that was great!
it felt so real.
@crazy2love - i’ve gotten cheated on by my first love..if he did that to me it would have hurt me a lot more.
This poem connected to me 95%. All my ex-bf’s basically used me like and then left me. It felt horrible. If I had to rate it would be a 5/5. Thanks for posting :].
wow…I am at a loss for words
@godfatherofgreenbay - Aww <3
Painful. Makes perfect sense, tho. Hey, don’t stop writing. That’s the worst thing you can do. Take it from someone who rarely writes nowadays, and has lost her touch. Don’t stop!
Thanks for your support. It means a lot.
I’m glad I found that this didn’t actually happen to you. Whew! I’ve been in that boat – I can understand how crazy it makes a person. Great read!!
You wrote heartache well!
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Actually you are beginning to inspire me to try to write something. I have 3 days off from work, and a 2 day stubble of unshaven beardo. The beardo of a weirdo. I have to do some shopping in the stores. I have not washed carefully today and I think I’d better wear a sweatshirt and keep my arms down so that little old ladies aren’t alarmed at the odors emanating from my pits. The pits under my arms, not the pits of my subconscious angst.
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i loved it…so intense…and heartbreaking. could feel the emotion through the words. glad it didnt happen to u!
Damnnn! So much anger. I love it.
That was intense! Awesome writing.
I can definitely feel the emotion, haha… That’s like the biggest understatement of the week.
Were you planning on expanding this into something or just doing it as an exercise?
~V
@TheMarriedFreshman - I hadn’t thought of expanding it. Hmm, I don’t know!